I found you on /hyw/ - and I very much liked the comic.
Using traditional art (or is it?) is definitely a plus for me and it works quite well in this story, at least for me, despite a little rough linework and anatomy sometimes. But you wrote that you intend to improve, so that's okay. Designs and expressions are good and I also liked them, together with the story. It's interesting how you presented the whole story as a 'prologue'
And as a side note - if you plan to keep using DA for hosting your comics, try to put some links, at least [NEXT PAGE] in the description, it would make browsing much easier.
Good luck with the next comic!